How does my poem sound?

I'm not sure who the speaker is. A girl or a boy? Is this same sex or opposite sex? You speak of "our youth" yet the erastes-eromenos relationship is male/male where one is a mature person, the other little more than a child. And in the case of Achilles and Patroclus where they seem to be close in age, I always thought of Achilles as the dominant one (I could be wrong) since he was the one of higher rank. I'm left wonder, searching for what you mean.